On holly
week, I went to a beach called Costa Azul it is a really nice place to spent
vacations with my family .We were really
excited because it was the first time my little nephew whose name is Diego was
going to the beach. We prepared our bags, lunch and all things necessary for
going and have fun.
This beach
is located in Sonsonate, El Salvador, when we arrived there the first thing I
made was going to the pool with all my cousins and then I showed Diego the
beautiful sand and sea .He looked impressed, we played there for a while
enjoying of the sunset, he was happy and excited as me .After that we ate
dinner and drank a cold lemonade for refreshing.
The second
day at the beach was even better. When I woke up at 9:oo o clock
I took a delicious breakfast with
my family , we couldn’t wait and we took a shower for going to the pool .Two hours
later I was resting in a hammock when suddenly I saw my best friend outside in
the beach ,they were looking for me in a motorcycle . I asked my parents if I
could go with them, they said yes.
We went to
my best friend’s house there we met more friends and we really enjoyed in the
pool, eating together, going outside and much more. At night was incredible I
stayed with a friend we saw the ocean and the stars together. That week was
amazing.
Written by: Mariela Guzman
Hi Mariela! I love your story. I think I'd like to go to Costa Azul as well! I'll offer a few critiques on your writing, but take them positively and keep in mind I'm no grammar expert.
ResponderEliminarI'm studying Spanish at my University and my professor has explained to me that in Spanish the word vacaciones, when used as a noun, is used to describe a vacation even if it's just one vacation you're referring to. In English we use vacation for one vacation and vacations for several. So in your title you would just say 'My Vacation' because you are just referring to this particular time. *On holly week, I went to a beach called Costa Azul it is a really nice place to spent vacations with my family .- Here I'm not 100% sure if your mean holiday week or holy week so I don't want to give you incorrect suggestions. I'm going to guess holiday week. You can just say 'On holiday I went to a beach called Costa Azul. It is a really nice place to spend vacations with my family. *We were really excited because it was the first time my little nephew whose name is Diego was going to the beach. We prepared our bags, lunch and all things necessary for going and have fun.- We were really excited because this was the first time my little cousin, Diego, would be going to the beach. We packed our bags, lunch, and everything we needed to have fun at the beach. *This beach is located in Sonsonate, El Salvador, when we arrived there the first thing I made was going to the pool with all my cousins and then I showed Diego the beautiful sand and sea .- This beach is located in Sonsonate, El Salvador. When we arrived, the first thing I did was go to the pool with all my cousins. Then I showed Diego the beautiful sand and sea. *He looked impressed, we played there for a while enjoying of the sunset, he was happy and excited as me .- He looked impressed. We played there for a while, enjoying the sunset. He was as happy and excited as I was. *and drank a cold lemonade for refreshing.- and drank a cold, refreshing lemonade. * I took a delicious breakfast with my family, we couldn’t wait and we took a shower for going to the pool . - I had a delicious breakfast with my family. We couldn't wait to take a shower and go to the pool. *outside in the beach ,they were looking for me in a motorcycle .- outside on the beach, they were on a motorcycle looking for me. *We went to my best friend’s house there we met more friends and we really enjoyed in the pool, eating together, going outside and much more. At night was incredible I stayed with a friend we saw the ocean and the stars together.- We went to my best friend's house where we met up with more friends. We really enjoyed the pool, eating together, going outside,and much more. Night time was incredible. I stayed with my friend and we saw the ocean and stars together.
Awesome story! Thank you again. ~Fatima S. (Team 1- University of South AL)
thanks for your recommendations Fatima , I will take them into account . Yeah you should visit Costa Azul it is an incredible place and you can practice your spanish here !
EliminarMariela, what a lovely story! I'm going to show you by using one of your sentences how you could improve your writing.
ResponderEliminarWhat you wrote:
"This beach is located in Sonsonate, El Salvador, when we arrived there the first thing I made was going to the pool with all my cousins and then I showed Diego the beautiful sand and sea."
What I would write:
"The beach is located in Sonsonate, El Salvador. The first thing I did when we arrived at the beach was swimming in the pool with all of my cousins! I showed Diego the beautiful sand and sea."
Hopefully that helps! Great job!
-Hannah S. (Team 1: Univ. of South AL)
Thanks Hannah for helping me , I am sure your recommendation will help me.
Eliminar