lunes, 21 de noviembre de 2016

"My Trip To San Salvador"

"My Trip To San Salvador"

One day, I was with my family, it was the morning of one saturday. We were planning to go to San Salvador to buy some stuff, and eat in a nice restaurant. So, we decided to go to San Salvador in car. I were traveling with my mother, father and even my grandmother. The problem (or conflict) was that me and my mom take a lot of time to get ready; but there was another conflict, and it is that my father usually drives very fast in the highway.

My mother and I took a lot of time getting ready, but eventually we all were ready to begin the trip to San Salvador. We got into our car, a Ford Escape 2013, that has enough espace for my father, my mother, my grandmother and me. I took my iPhone with me to put music in the car, using spotify and the bluetooth function. I like rock and metal music, and that was the other conflict, that I like to play loud my music, and my family didn´t like that kind of music.

My father was driving very fast, and I liked that, but my mother and my grandmother were worried because we could havean accident and crash in the highway... Suddenly, a bus was driving fast and came from the other part of the highway to our way and we almost crash! But, my father stopped the car in time... and he saved ourlifes. We were in shock and very surprised. But then, we continued our trip to San Salvador.

After that, we bought some cloth in Pull&Bear, ate some pasta in Olive Garden, and we had a great time in family. And there, we met my uncles so we joined there in the restaurant and ate together. After that, the left, and we began going back to home... Santa Ana. We almost crashed, but at the end of the day, we had a nice trip.

6 comentarios:

  1. I hope you had fun! What did you do once you got there? I wish I could go to San Salvador!

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    1. Thanks! Sorry I hadn´t finished the story, but now is complete and you can discover what I did there.

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  2. Your trip to San Salvador sounds very exciting! One thing I noticed in your blog was your use of verbs in the past tense. Make sure that whatever verb tense you use (past/present/future), your verb agrees with the subject and time!

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    1. Sorry, Sorry I hadn´t finished the story yet, but now is complete. I will always check my tenses, thanks for the advice.

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  3. Felipe, great story! I really enjoyed hearing about San Salvador! What I'll do is take one of your sentences, and rewrite it to show you how you could make little improvements! What you wrote: "Me and my mother took a lot time getting ready, but eventually we all were ready to begin the trip to San Salvador." How I would write it: "My mother and I took a lot of time getting ready, but eventually we were all ready to begin the trip to San Salvador." Very subtle differences to help improve your writing. I hope that helps! Great job!
    -Hannah S. (Team 1: Univ. of South AL)

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    1. Sorry, I hadn´t finished the story, but now is complete. Thanks for the advice. I will change that.

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